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    Topic

    Do you agree or disagree with the following statement？ A job with more vacation time is better than a job with high salary but less vacation time.

    Rewritten Sample Writing

    The issue whether people should choose a job with a high salary or more vacation time is a topic that is often discussed and there are differing opinions about this issue. Some prefer to have a high salary， because they could buy some things that they like most， while others would choose a job with more vacation time for enjoying themselves. In my view， I prefer to have a job with more vacation time instead of a high salary for several reasons.

    Admittedly， earning money is one of the aims of our work. No one could deny the fact that money could not only maintain our daily lives but also could help us to achieve some of our personal goals， such as buying a car， living in a big house or helping those who live in poverty or starvation. Making money will enable us to improve our living environment and quality， and therefore getting a job with a high salary， is significant to us.

    However， others go into rapture at mere notion of getting money， however having a job with a high salary， is less useful than many people believe. People， who are addicted to a high income， have to spend more time working or staying in the office， and as a result， it is impossible for them to devote enough time and energy in communicating with family members. Moreover， it is difficult to develop and cultivate their children‘s character and interpersonal skills and they may become more solitary and even suffer from certain emotional or psychological problems. Therefore， it is undesirable to hanker for a high salary instead of staying with family members.

    Furthermore， the majority of people believe that having more vacation time will provide them additional opportunities to broaden their horizons， which may put them in a favorable position prove their situation. As we know， traveling can allow us to actually meet different cultures， which we could not get from textbooks or classrooms. As an architect， although he could learn about masterpieces from the internet and magazines， the feeling of touch of the actual buildings， such as the Sydney Opera house， is totally different， We could find abundant information about the plans， sections and elevations， but we could not recognize the size， the space or the material. Having vacation time and traveling could provide us with an opportunity to realize the dream and therefore almost all of us benefit from vacation time.

    Therefore， I am firmly convinced that having a job with more vacation time， will bring about a profound impact on families， the person himself and even the society as whole.