同等學(xué)力英語(yǔ)作文原文

　　Today, the high expenses of medicne and difficulty to see a doctor more and more affect our life, and they begin to become an important social problem in our  country. Many people usually complain about a same thing that they must spends much money when go to hospital every time or it is too difficult to see a doctor.

　　What cause the problem? Firstly, many medical ways are not better in the Reform Medical Care, such as, many hospitals not only give medical advice, but also run the business of medicine. It is way which bring about rise in the medicine price. Secondly, many ill people like to go to see big hospital for a cold.

　　In my view, If we want to solve many problem in the Reform Medical Care in our country, we should bread the connection between seeing doctor and the price of medicine in hospital. At same time, we should put many better doctors and medical tools into small hospitals, and advance their medical technology level. 

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