同等學(xué)力英語作文原文

　　As China's urbanization, more and more people have poured into the city. For example，it has annual growth of Shanghai's permanent population of nearly 400,000 since this century. Althought the additional population brings rich human resources for social and economic development, it results many problems.

　　One of the more obvious problem in the following is that the pressure on housing, transportation and employment, which is great originally, is becoming a growing with the increasing population; Second, there is increasing difficulty in the management of additional population on current household registration system, social insurance and education for children cannot being protected; Third, the maintenance of elder and the education of children stay in rural areas will be confronted with crisis.

　　From my point of view, urbanization is the trend of social development, the government should consider many problems from the global view in the process of urbanization , published effective policies to ensure stability development of society.

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　　文章較好地完成了題目的要求，內(nèi)容比較充實(shí)，表達(dá)比較流暢，結(jié)構(gòu)也比較合理。不足之處在詞匯、標(biāo)點(diǎn)的運(yùn)用上還應(yīng)更為仔細(xì)，另外還有一些語法錯(cuò)誤，個(gè)別句子表達(dá)不夠通暢，希望以后注意，繼續(xù)努力。