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　　In recent years,with the development of economic, the improvement of people’s  life level and the demandment of cities’construction, more and more other place people have moved into big cities. They have been making a great of contributions for constrction of cities. However, there is a denying the fact that they have been also bringing into many problems.  For instance, the increase of the city population, the discrease of people seek chance of work and the relatively reduce of other resources，etc.

　　When it comes to what is the biggest question, opinions differ from person to person. Some argue that it is the increase of population. The increase have been casusing many questions in the cities. On the one hand , house, education and other sources are facing shortage. On the other hand, finding work is becoming very difficult. It will cause many social question and bring great load.

　　As far as I concerned , I believe that people should find themselves a wider stage of development and realize their value . They should choose correctly in the face of such fierce competition and heavy queston. 

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