國(guó)際學(xué)校的同學(xué)們?cè)跍?zhǔn)備雅思寫作時(shí)，最有效以及最有權(quán)威性的參考資料無(wú)疑是劍橋官方出版的劍橋雅思真題系列叢書。劍橋里面的寫作文章有7分以上的高分范文，也有低分的文章供考生們參考�？脊籴槍�(duì)每篇作文都給出了詳細(xì)的評(píng)分說(shuō)明，根據(jù)評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，從內(nèi)容，邏輯連貫，詞匯，語(yǔ)法四個(gè)方面分析了每篇作文得高分以及得低分的原因。那么很多同學(xué)們又會(huì)有這樣的疑問(wèn)：劍橋的范文固然好，但是如何才能全面有效地利用高分范文呢?尤其是其中的一些論證邏輯以及好詞好句。針對(duì)這一問(wèn)題，在本篇文章中，本文將以劍橋五中的gap year一文為例，深入為同學(xué)們解決這一難題。

　　Topic: In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people to do this.

　　劍橋五中的這篇gap year應(yīng)該是烤鴨們很熟悉的一篇范文，文章寫得非常簡(jiǎn)潔出彩。那么針對(duì)這一篇高分范文該如何進(jìn)行有效的利用與仿寫呢?

　　首先，我們分析一下這篇文章的審題思路：

　　文章的對(duì)象是高中畢業(yè)生，兩邊對(duì)立面是高中畢業(yè)后直接上大學(xué)與高中畢業(yè)后工作或者旅游一年去上大學(xué)。從題目關(guān)鍵詞切入，優(yōu)點(diǎn)分析可以從很多方面進(jìn)行分類討論。比如可以從工作一年的優(yōu)點(diǎn)與旅游一年的優(yōu)點(diǎn)分析，可以與直接上大學(xué)的學(xué)生對(duì)比，經(jīng)歷gap year一年的學(xué)生的優(yōu)點(diǎn)有哪些。可以從學(xué)生的不同情況，窮學(xué)生與富學(xué)生體驗(yàn)一年gap year的好處分析，思路非常多。同理，論述缺點(diǎn)的時(shí)候也是一樣的思維方式。

　　其次，我們分析下這篇范文的開(kāi)頭段：

　　It is quite common these days for young people in many countries to have a break from studying after graduating from high school. This trend is not restricted to rich students who have the money to travel, but is also evident among poorer students who choose to work and become economically independent for a period of time.

　　首先在思路上，文章開(kāi)篇用人物分類法開(kāi)頭，把學(xué)生分類為有錢在gap year旅游的學(xué)生以及家庭困難，在gap year工作的學(xué)生。其次，句式上，這個(gè)開(kāi)頭一共用了兩個(gè)長(zhǎng)句結(jié)構(gòu)，一個(gè)是it is引導(dǎo)的句型it is quite common these days for sb. to do; 第二個(gè)句型用了be restricted to+從句，but is also evident+從句的結(jié)構(gòu)。通過(guò)學(xué)習(xí)這樣的開(kāi)頭方式，我們?cè)趯懽魑牡臅r(shí)候在開(kāi)頭部分也可以套用這樣的邏輯分類以及長(zhǎng)句結(jié)合的開(kāi)頭來(lái)仿寫一個(gè)簡(jiǎn)潔有新意的開(kāi)頭。

　　然后，我們仔細(xì)分析下文章的主體段：

　　The reasons for this trend may involve the recognition that a young adult who passes directly from school to university is rather restricted in terms of general knowledge and experience of the world. By contrast, those who have spent some time earning a living or travelling to other places, have a broader view of life and better personal resources to draw on. They tend to be more independent, which is very important factor in academic study and research, as well as giving them an advantage in terms of coping with the challenges of student life.

　　首先在思路上，文章用了一個(gè)對(duì)比論證，對(duì)比了直接上大學(xué)對(duì)知識(shí)與經(jīng)驗(yàn)的缺乏，工作或旅游一年可以開(kāi)闊眼界，積累人脈。然后用了因果論證，論述了這樣的好處，對(duì)未來(lái)的幫助。對(duì)比論證一直是一種比較常用的論證方法，尤其在兩邊對(duì)立面以及優(yōu)缺點(diǎn)分析時(shí)，用對(duì)比與因果的結(jié)合是一種有效的思路。句式上，用了三個(gè)長(zhǎng)句結(jié)構(gòu)，一個(gè)是The reasons for this trend may involve the recognition that……+who…, 一個(gè)同位語(yǔ)與定語(yǔ)的結(jié)合，可以用于原因句的開(kāi)頭。第二個(gè)句型用了those who…的定語(yǔ)從句。第三個(gè)句型用了…, which…, as well as doing…, 用了非限定性從句與并列結(jié)構(gòu)，可用于因果論證時(shí)寫優(yōu)點(diǎn)的句型。詞匯上，passes directly from …to, be rather restricted in terms of…, draw on, tend to, as well as, cope with等詞組都是值得仿寫應(yīng)用的一些好詞。

　　However, there are certainly dangers in taking time off at the important age. Young adults may end up never returning to their studies or finding it difficult to readapt to an academic environment. They may think that it is better to continue in a particular job, or to do something completely different from a university course. But overall, I think this is less likely today, when academic qualifications are essential for getting a reasonable career.

　　在寫gap year缺點(diǎn)這段時(shí)，思路上基本以說(shuō)理為主，學(xué)生很容易放棄學(xué)業(yè)。寫了這種現(xiàn)象的原因，但又結(jié)合現(xiàn)在的實(shí)際情況分析了這種可能性很少會(huì)發(fā)生在重視文憑的時(shí)代，條理清楚，也是我們?cè)趯懭秉c(diǎn)時(shí)的一種值得仿寫的思路。本段在語(yǔ)言上較簡(jiǎn)單，基本以there be與簡(jiǎn)單句為主，此外用到了形式賓語(yǔ)find it difficult to do的結(jié)構(gòu)。詞匯上，用take time off避免表達(dá)重復(fù)，并且使用了end up doing, readapt to等詞組。

　　最后，我們來(lái)分析一下結(jié)尾段：

　　My view is that young people should be encouraged to broaden their horizons. That is the best way for them to get a clear perspective of what they are hoping to do with their lives and why. Students with such a perspective are usually the most effective and motivated ones and taking a year off may be the best way to gain this.

　　內(nèi)容上，最后一段用了最常規(guī)的思路，給出觀點(diǎn)，并且總結(jié)上文。句式上，用了被動(dòng)態(tài)與從句，比如說(shuō)sb should be encouraged to do, 與that is the best way for sb to do等句式。詞匯上用了broaden their horizons, get a clear perspective, take a year off等替換結(jié)構(gòu)，避免單詞的重復(fù)性。

　　只有對(duì)好的范文進(jìn)行有效的總結(jié)與分析，模仿其拓展思路，詞匯與句式的用法，才能有所積累，提高寫作水平。同時(shí)，對(duì)于一些低分范文，烤鴨們也要進(jìn)行仔細(xì)分析，避免犯同樣的錯(cuò)誤。

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