With the development of modern society, an increasing people come to the big city, such as BeiJing, ShangHai or Guangzhou, nevertheless, some problems have been appeared, too.

　　One of the problems is housing prices. Most of people who work in the big city are rent house to live. But after several years, those people decided to buy house. The more people buying the more prices are increasing. Recent years, average person can’t afford the housing price at all. The other serious problem is traffic jam. The number of cars is increasing every day, but our rode are limited. So they often waste much time on the road.

　　As far as I am concerned, the government should attach great importance to these phenomena. Many effective measures should be taken to control housing price and traffic jam. For each citizen, they should travel more by such public means of transportation as the subway or bus. In short, only by all aspects’ efforts, these problems can be solved finally.

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