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　　My View on Reform of Medical Care in China

　　Nobody could have failed to notice the fact that the medical expense has become a grave problem in China in the past few years. Reports are often heard about increase of the medical expense and difficulty in getting medical service. Actually, the phenomenon has been so widespread that it has caused nationwide concern.

　　A number of factors account for the problem, but the following are the most critical ones. In the first place, the number of hospital is little. Especially, it is less in the country. In the second place, the drug price is unfair. To patients, the medicine requirement is necessary so that it have led the drug price to be more and more expensive. Last but not least, laws and regulations regarding the medical expense were not severe enough in the past.

　　My view on reform of medical care in china is increasing the number of hospital, reducing the drug price and working out pertinent laws and regulations.

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　　文章結(jié)構(gòu)符合題目要求，內(nèi)容比較充實，層次清楚，本來也是一篇不錯的文章，但是由于第三段論述自己的 觀點時所用的語言不夠流暢，有中式英語的嫌疑，導(dǎo)致文章整體質(zhì)量下降。今后一定要注意多看看范文，學(xué)習(xí)語言表達(dá)方面的技巧。加油啊。